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Novel By: Courtnee25
Horror


Gregory Richards is an 18 year old with many 'unnatural' problems. Suicidal thoughts, chronic sleepwalking disorders, and hunters. As both the worlds of he and Jasper Gretua entwine. Gregory realises there is more to the lingering secret then he could've ever imagined. Immortality, murder, and seduction. He soon begins to question his own self as something starts to happen to him, and his six-teen year old sister Missy. Jasper wasn't even answering everything, and his ever growing suspitions of his friends, and family, grow ever more stronger inside him. As he realises, he isn't human anymore, but something he could've never imagined.... View table of contents...

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Submitted: Aug 25, 2008    Reads: 470    Comments: 26    Likes: 7   


Chapter One-Just Another Day

The wind whistled by me with a chilling effect, causing me to shiver, while the long untamed grass and bushes irritated my legs as I walked by. Brushing against my bare ankles in agonising torment. Accompanying the bushes, were thorns. Which now I realise must have already done a number on my skin.

Around me, was a huge mass of trees, shadowed together with the early night making an illusion of a cage. I looked around in distress; it was not like me to go out wandering after dark. I do not even know how I got here. As I continued walking aimlessly into the unknown reaches of the forest, I noticed that the trees were getting tighter together. Almost as if wherever I was, I was not intended to escape.

I could tell it was sunset, a pure orange colour peaking through the trees above me. For a brief moment, I actually stopped to admire it. It was nice that there was something to provide comfort. The full blow of night would be approaching soon. Before I looked up and seen the sunset I would have thought it was night already.

However, something besides the band of trees unsettled me. Something that quickened the pace of both my walking speed, and my pulse. I could feel it deep within my bones. Something that made my heart race a thousand beats a minute. “Why did you come out here Gregory?” I taunted myself; there were a thousand more questions worth asking. Nevertheless, this one really ate at me.

Soon I had one certain conclusion. Someone was fast approaching. It was racing through the forest at an unnatural speed. Cutting through the vines and whatever blocked their way. There was more than one of them too; in fact, a group of them, and they were not too keen on a friendly greeting. I cannot remember the last time I was ever this frightened. Maybe the numerous times my father had rushed us out of our homes. Maybe the strange look he would get on his face sometimes, that blankvacant expression that would sit on his face almost every waking moment.

I seemed to have forgotten my little sister Missy, on the day she turned 16. That VERY day, my father came stumbling in the front door yelling at us to pack our things. Telling us “They’re back again.’’ He yelled, ‘’they have found us!’’

Well today, I am 18, an age I have scorned since my 17th, my 16th, and so on...

Suddenly I felt as if I were being jerked around like a rag doll. I must have lost thought while I was reminiscing my past. Only to see a large group of people standing around me in an absolute complete circle. Some were handling a weapon, obviously out of their own kitchen, and some, with torches. I felt fear grip me hard and I started to cry a bit. A single tear of pain rolling down my cheek. I must have been so distracted; I did not notice that my legs were scratched from knee-to-toe.

Dry blood crusted on the bottom of my jeans. I screamed in pain, the loud echo filling everywhere around me. For a second the people backed away in shock. Pointing their weapons closer to my bare throat. “What do you want from me?” I cried, my father always said it was not proper for a grown man to cry in public. But this was just too much to bear.

The people moved aside a bit, but only enough for a man to come through. A tall, muscular man that I was not too excited to mess with.

“You are a danger; we must be rid of you.” He replied. He sounded confident, but I could tell he was UN eased. He probably did not have a choice whether or not he would kill me. “Now, you will DIE!’’ The man placed his knife against my throat. The pressure was hurting me so much that I wanted to break down in tears. But another man held my head in place.

“The only danger around here is YOU people!” I screamed with rage, so many mixed emotions were filling my head that I lost it. I have committed no crime, and certainly no criminal offense to the law. I have been a good citizen; however, we were probably running too much for them to notice our behaviours.

I screamed in pain as I felt the knife dig further into my flesh, a shrill howl of pure agony echoing out into the distance, awakening almost every animal in the forest. I wanted desperately to release myself from his grasp, so then I could release all of my adrenalin by bolting deep into the trees. I would probably make it what? 100 yards, give or take. Slowly I would be trapped like a rabbit by a hungry wolf for his lunch. At least then, I could perish with the remainder of my dignity.

Drops of blood were seeping out of my broken skin. I could not bare much more of this torture. Why were they being so slow about it? Why couldn’t they just end my life and get it over with? I managed to notice though, that the people were wearing rubber gloves, and the face masks a doctor uses for surgery or when treating someone with an illness to avoid catching the disease. I did not know what to think, everything was just so over whelming. The only thing I was capable of thinking about was the knife that would soon slide across my throat and claim my life.

“You are a danger to us all.” The man stated, “Therefore you must die.” After he said that his partner grabbed me by the hair and pulled my head back, making sure that my neck was clearly visible. I grunted with pain and tried to fight their grip, but it was no use. Both men seemed to know what they were doing; they could probably deal with much worse than me. Though people have told me how attractive I was, and some of my ‘exes’ said I have quite the ‘six pack’. There really WAS nothing to me.

However, I had an irritating feeling in the back of my nose, one of those aggravating tickling feelings in the back of your nostril; that usually only meant one thing. I had to sneeze. I signalled to the men, but they laughed. They probably think I am joking, I thought. However, I was not planning to hold back such a teasing feeling at all.

“Ah-ah-ahhhhhchoooooo!” The man had immediately dropped his knife asI fell forwards on to the muddy, but somehow comfortable Earth. Yet with the satisfaction of getting rid of that dreadful tickle, I was surprised to see that everyone had backed up. Even the men had moved away, tearing their facemasks off in disgust, and then they replaced them with new ones.

“Uh-oh!” I said allowed, “I don’t suppose you could give me five seconds?” I asked, but they just looked at each other, than back at me again. I backed away, but bolted when I heard one of the people in the crowd yell “GET HIM!”

I was already a good ten yards into the trees, but I knew they probably were not far behind. Their weapons held up with confidence, torches singeing the hanging vines and branches as they advanced on their prey. Nothing can save my sorry soul. I thought as I felt my tired lungs begin to struggle for air. My legs going numb from exhaustion. I could hear them even better now, yelling at each other to “Run faster!”

I am surprised I survived this long, maybe it’s because of the toasted waffles I had for breakfast this morning. Or maybe it was pure adrenalin to escape my pursuers. I did not know but before I knew it I had stumbled over a fallen branch and was soon unconscious on the ground below me.


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Comments:

This is the first chapter out of mt novel, I am still working on chapter two, but it will be posted as soon as I'm finished.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Very good. I love the word choice and imagery. I await the next installment.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks

its good for 5 year olds, you should definatly write childres books

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha, says the one who writes about perverted sex, and has horrible grammar.

This is very nice and creative, i really like it. Let me know when you make the next chapters :)

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

okay! i sure will :P

Its not a childrens book, just to let you know Lucien.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

It doesnt even look even close to a childrens book

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Hey Courtnee, its Missy, I love your novels they are always a great thing to read! You are very talented!

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.

Hehe yah, don't listen to Lucien; have you seen what he writes. It's a great story, and nicely written. Keep me posted for new updates, k?

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

I know, his writing is terribly oerverted... :o

I'll be sure to Ant thanks, and I just put in 3 of my poems that I wrote, hope you lke them.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

I like it please update I agree with Ant, Lucien is just messed up

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah I know, lol, I just figured out how ti make my comment come out as an Author comment! :P

I just want to let you know this is no were near a childrens book, its very mature!

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, Its nice to hear that :)

Quote
"The man placed his knife against my throat...I screamed in pain as I felt the knife dig further into my flesh...Ah-ah-ahhhhhchoooooo!” I fell forwards"

To me it seems you may have missed a line or two here. If the knife is against your throat and digging in, a sneeze would likely decapitate you. Hmmm, well that would definitely solve the tickle in the nose. Lol.
Good story line but it does seem a bit simple. No that's not the right word. I don't know how to explain it, or it could just be me.
Please continue and an "I Like It" for you.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

No, when the men heard him they ran, so it couldn't decapitate him, you have to read more carefully.

J Paul
(not registered user)

I agree with the sneeze thing. But your words pleasure they bring. I sense a little humor in your pen, but then I will wait until you write again!

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the feedback, and yes, there is a little comedy in it.

Okay it is the author, laMitchell, the secind last answer, I looked over my other copy I have saved on office word, and then I noticed what you mentioned,now I am sorry for my slight ignorance there, but I have just edited. I have noticed that it would in fact decapitate him, so I edited to say that the man dropped his knife. Thanks for the help! :)

Posted: Aug 29, 2008

I like this so much! Kepp writing--I shall keep reading!! and--I saw ur comment with Dannika about a weird guy here--did u get a comment from some dude wanting to be "more than friends"?-I got one--he was pretty gross and crazy--it freaked me out--I hope u didn't get that same one--bleh!

Posted: Aug 30, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, it might have been the same guy..But anyways thanks for the feedback, and I will have chapter 3 out in no time!

I like it so far...I love love detail and you done a great job with detail..its interesting..and i'll be back soon to read more :)

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

Author Comment:

kk

Really enjoyed the read. I'll be finishing the rest of it as soon as my night classes are over.

Posted: Sep 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! :D

hi! courtnee.

1. COURTNEE: Your name of Courtnee gives you the ability to be creative along practical lines of endeavour. Your ideas can be very original and inventive. You enjoy being with people in a social environment. Your personal appearance is important to you, for you desire to make a good impression on others. Your pleasant manner attracts people to you with their problems and you are capable of offering practical advice, though you may not follow such advice yourself. This name causes you to be somewhat too concerned with the personalities, problems, and activities of other people.


2. P COURTNEE DEPOISE: There are 16 letters in your name. Those 16 letters total to 82. There are 8 vowels and 8 consonants in your name.

Your number is: 1
The characteristics of #1 are: Initiating action, pioneering, leading, independent, attaining, individual.

The expression or destiny for #1: A number 1 Expression denotes the skilled executive with keen administrative capabilities. You must develop the capacity to be a fine leader, sales executive, or promoter. You have the tools to become an original person with a creative approach to problem solving, and a penchant for initiating action. Someone may have to follow behind you to handle the details, but you know how to get things going and make things happen. You have a good mind and the ability to use it for your advancement. Because of these factors, you have much potential for achievement and financial rewards. Frequently, this expression belongs to one running a business or striving to achieve a level of accomplishment on ones talents and efforts. You have little need for much supervision, preferring to act on your own with little restraint. You are both ambitious and determined. Self-confident and self-reliant must be yours, as you develop a strong unyielding will and the courage of your convictions.

Although you fear loneliness, you want to be left alone. You fear routine and being in a rut. You often jump the gun because you are afraid of being left behind.

The negative attributes of the 1 Expression are egotism and a self-centered approach to life. This is an aggressive number and if it is over-emphasized it is very hard to live with. You do not have to be overly aggressive to fulfill your destiny. The 1 has a natural instinct to dominate and to be the boss; adhering to the concept of being number One. Again, you do not have to dominate and destroy in order to lead and manage.

Your Soul Urge number is: 8
A Soul Urge number of 8 means: With an 8 soul urge, you have a natural flair for big business and the challenges imposed by the commercial world. Power, status and success are very important to you. You have strong urges to supervise, organize and lead. Material desires are also very pronounced. You have good executive abilities, and with these, confidence, energy and ambition.

Your mind is analytical and judgment sound; you're a good judge of material values and also human character. Self-controlled, you rarely let emotions cloud judgment. You are somewhat of an organizer at heart, and you like to keep those beneath you organized and on a proper track. This is a personality that wants to lead, not follow. You want to be known for your planning ability and solid judgment.

The negative aspects of the 8 soul urge are the often dominating and exacting attitude. You may have a tendency to be very rigid, sometimes stubborn.

Your Inner Dream number is: 11
An Inner Dream number of 11 means: You dream of casting the light of illumination; of being the true idealist. You secretly believe there is more to life than we can know or prove, and you would like to be provider of the 'word' from on high.

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

My last name is depoise actually, disregard demont, lol!

Omg Courtnee, I LOVE this chapter! It is AMAZING! You put so much detail, and even teased us with a cliff hanger at the end :O

Well I am new to booksie so, hi! I will be reading more of your work right now!! :D

Posted: Oct 14, 2008

Author Comment:

okay, you do that lol! And thanks! ALOT!

you have really good imagery. your ability to capture what's going on around the characters and put it into words is something a lot of writers would kill for.

this chapter is very intriguing :)


L.

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks :D now all that you need to do is read the next chapters! lol

Very good start, I can't wait to read more!

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks!

I really enjoyed this chapter, your descriptions of the environment are top notch. It can be a bit scattered at times, but other then that that an extremely good start. I gave it an "I like it" mark
Yours truly, Paulo

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot! I will be editing any flaws out after I am complete, but thanks for the small advice and I will be sure to take your opinion into consideration. :D

by the way you spelled the tag wrong.

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

What? lol

Excellent story. Loved the way you write. hit me up on instant messenger if you have it.

hokejr2001@hotmail.com

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks, and I sure will ;)

Courtnee,

I liked the story line and the sense of suspense. I like the way you slowly reveal parts of the protagonist's personality and mental state. Because I did not read the synopsis paragraph, I did not even realize the protagonist was male until you posed his question. I enjoy that sort of revelation. I'm looking forward to reading more.

In a former life I did proofreading for a small magazine. If you would like that sort of feedback I would be glad to give it. There are some words that are used inappopriately, and several cases of verb number mistakes. Stuff like that. In a few cases your use of punctuation caused me to stop and reread a sentece or paragraph to grasp your intent. These sorts of distractions may put off an agent or publisher. They divert the attention from the meat of the story. By using your words and punctuation correctly you can turn this into filet mignon.

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, and I would like if you could give me specific places where is confuses you. Thank you plenty for the feedback!

Suzanne
(not registered user)

Great chapter, I see you have many fans on this novel, room for one more? GREAT WORK!

Posted: Nov 8, 2008

Author Comment:

I have room, lol thanks!



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