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Hiding in the dark

Poem By: Courtnee25
Horror


It a poem based on how much I long to be noticed sometimes! The pic is actually me xD View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Oct 26, 2008    Reads: 66    Comments: 6    Likes: 4   


                                   Hiding In The Dark

When I am crying,

Do you see me?

Do you hold me, comfort me?

If I was hurt,

Would you stop my pain?

Would you pick me up and carry me home?

If I was dead,

Would you mourn my passing?

Cry until your tears grew dry,

If I fell,

Would you pick me up?

Tell me, “It’s okay...”

And carry me all of the way,

If I cut myself,

Would you stop the bleeding?

Would you send me to the depths of your heart,

And tell me that you love me?

So far,

I am but alone,

Sitting, Waiting,

Where were you five minutes ago,

When I lay crying on the floor,

Death will soon follow.

And many, many more...


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Comments:

Very sad and depressing, but still very well written. You need to separate some of the paragraph. I gave it an "I like it" mark.

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Depressing is my thing ;) lol

I gave it an 'I like it' mark.

It's very deep, but it was definitely a job well-done.

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

Author Comment:

xD thanks

I give it an I likey mark!

Amazing poem, though it made me almost cry!

Ecspetailly since you said this is how you feel sometimes!

Really deep!

Posted: Oct 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, this poem actually means a lot to me beacuse it has a lot of my TRUE emotions in it! Thanks!

I-I am speachless.
Who made you feel so sad Courtnee25? I mean I have read some pretty depressing, tears in your eyes kinda stuff-but-this is so sad.

I LOVE the way you asked If I cut myself,

Would you stop the bleeding?

or, If I was dead,

Would you mourn my passing?

Great poem! And those are my favourite lines out of your poem! I will say I like it!

Posted: Nov 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! Thanks muchly!

I like it, nice one....Keep it up!>

Posted: Nov 5, 2008

Author Comment:

kk, thanks, whats with the >< lol

I felt this before...it sucks to feel this way...just brought up memories, and thinking to myself about them...anyways, you describe these very feelings well and true...

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks a lot!



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