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One Night Stand (hilarious challenge)

Poem By: rebel
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this is for the hilarious challenge! even tho this aint really hilarious n all...lol. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 14, 2008    Reads: 167    Comments: 5    Likes: 2   


Two sets of hands

Two sets of feet

Pressing together

Beneath a cold sheet.

Who would've thought we'd end up here?

So close and yet so far from each other.

Almost tempted to pinch myself now,

Surely, I'm drunk and this is an early morning dream.

Two sets of hands,

Two sets of feet

Pressing together

Beneath a cold sheet.

Alas! The heated moment extends!

If I cry out, will a voice be heard?

Oops! I roll and hit the lamp!

A splash of colour in the midst of darkness.

Two sets of ears

Two sets of eyes

Savouring each other

For at dawn, we rise.


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Comments:

heh, thats realy good!

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Aahahaahah thankyou, I'm glad you like it!

Lol, nice. (:
I would have never thought to use the line like this..great job! (:

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Ahahahaah yep a bit out of my usual range as well! Thankyou!

This is nicely written, there's a sense of mischief in it too! Challenge well met.

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou thankyou! I'm really pleased you interpreted it so well!

rebel:

Good one! Enjoyed it. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

If you get the chance, please read my more recent postings of "Our Grampa Ed", "Excitement inspired..." & "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3". Thank you.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

I will try very hard to get to them Edward! But thankyou sincerely for commenting so nicely!

loved every line , very well written , keep producing to this standard and we'll all be green with envy.

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

LMFAO AW BLESS YOU 'DREAMING OF YOU'. Much appreciated! Keep commenting like that, and you'll make me blush. ;)



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