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Submitted: Sep 25, 2008 Reads: 55 Comments: 8 Likes: 3
Somewhere
Somewhere kids are crying,
Somewhere people are dying,
Somewhere a dead man is lying,
Somewhere my hope is losing,
Somewhere there is blood that’s oozing.
Somewhere a convertible is cruising,
But what about the poverty?
And the loss of our natures trees?
The severe weather that affects you and me,
The loss of homes, love and our glee
What will we do but sit here and cry.
And hope cancer is cured, but is it? No! And I know why...
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Sixth line i feel is outta of sync
was it for rhyming only, or was their an idea
but the rest of it went great
Posted: Sep 26, 2008
That was really good. Please keep me updated.
Posted: Sep 26, 2008
I have an idea why, as well. You hammer it home Courtnee. What's not to like?
craaig
Posted: Oct 17, 2008
Hi courtnee. Good sentiment. Sounds like you meant it.
Maybe the rhymes are a little forced, if you pardon me saying? Ricky.
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
hi! courtnee. i appreciate these concerns of urs but what is the solution. the issues u raise here r grave and worth looking into. hope there is a remedy lying somewhere and everything becomes ok one day. u r a thinking poet. lol. ;-)
Posted: Oct 21, 2008
very honest, intence rhyming though, but still a good work...
Posted: Oct 22, 2008
This is sooo good
i love how you get into everything
the 6th lne it kinda out of sync
but i love it
Posted: Oct 23, 2008
I agree that the 6th line is kinda out of everything lol! But amazing poem! Geat read! lmao I get that you hate it lol! But WE LOVE IT! Great read!
Posted: Oct 30, 2008
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