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SHE FOOLED THEM.

Poem By: dadio
Poetry


A GIRL'S SUICIDE ATTEMPT. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 19, 2008    Reads: 78    Comments: 3    Likes: 0   


She had fooled them all again;
Hoodwinked them into thinking
She’d be safe outside the locked

Ward; and taking Bronston’s cut
Throat razor (he thought he hid
It well) she slit her wrists till

Fountains poured red across her
Clothes and all around; and there
Was that buzzing sound; that voice

Screaming loud inside her head:
I’m free again, free from pain,
Echoing through her freaked out

Brain, slithering along her
Jagged veins, her eyes gazing
At the coming storm of white

And blues; the nurses cursing;
The docs crestfallen over
Their soiled angel, splattering

The room with her crimson rush,
Without care or word or God
Damned curse or a shameful blush.


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Comments:

I love this poem, I know it's morbid, but there is just something about it that is so real. Great work!!!

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

De Gustibus non est disputandem- Horace
Try and be a little more verbose in your author comment .

Maybe just try 'thank you 'in latin
Just for as change

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

I no little latin; how about Italian.La ringrazio per la lettura e il commento.

Excellent work Terry. As always you make it seem so easy but the result is truly 'gobsmacking'. I especially like 'at the coming storm of white, and blues' It tells us so much more than - the nurses and dr's rushed towards her.

Posted: Oct 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, irwin.



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