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Friendship or More? ( response to Kritika's challenge)

Poem By: KitKat123
Poetry


This is a challenge response poem to Kritika's challenge. The challange was I was given a sentence, Analyse The Use Of Herbs In Curing Certain Common Diseases, and I had to make a poem like so. So, here it is! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 3, 2008    Reads: 59    Comments: 6    Likes: 2   


A ~ All it took was one glance
N ~ Never again would I be under another's trance
A ~ As I looked into your beautiful eyes
L ~ Love and want made me hypnotized
Y ~ You made my heart beat fast
S ~ Stopping never, wanting it to last
E ~ Every moment was memorized

T ~ Tears of joy fell from my eyes
H ~ Hoping this would never end
E ~ Evading the fact that we're best friends

U ~ Unopened feelings ready to burst
S ~ Showing them to you is my thirst
E ~ Eventhough it would be tough

O ~ Oh who cared if it was love
F ~ Falling deeper under your spell

H ~ Happy it was for you that I fell
E ~ Everything changed when I realized
R ~ Real love not friendship was what I saw in my eyes
B ~ Bursting with anticipation to tell you
S ~ Still holding back, not sure if you liked me to

I ~ In the same way that I did
N ~ Not caring, I was so sure you would that I'd place a bid

C ~ Charlotte, my friend, liked you at one time
U ~ Until she found out that you didn't want her in your rhyme
R ~ Regret and hurt was all she would feel
I ~ I didn't want those feelings to steal
N ~ No, not those feelings of rejection
G ~ Girl, what I want is affection

C ~ Coming to tell you, here I walk
E ~ Every step I took felt like stepping on sharp rocks
R ~ Regret I was beginning to take
T ~ That feeling came with every new step I began to make
A ~ Arriving in front of your welcoming face
I ~ I instantly felt right in place
N ~ Not waiting for you to say a word

C ~ Chattering I went and you stood there and heard
O ~ " Over I'm done," I thought to myself
M ~ My calculations wrong, I saw something else
M ~ My gosh how his face lit up
O ~ Open mouth letting out a reliefed gush
N ~ Not believing what I heard

D ~ Didn't understand, how your words slurred
I ~ I couldn't believe the words you said
S ~  Standing there, trying to get it through my head
E ~ Every word was said and grew
A ~ And the only words I heard was I love you to
S ~ So now we stand here both amazed
E ~ Everything was right as we gazed
S ~ Silently, sweetly, lovingly into eachothers' eyes

~KitKat123


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Comments:

KOOL

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for your comment!

That was so beautiful n touching Kitkat
you did such a great job!!!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I was hoping you would like it! I wasn't exactly sure if I did a good job or not. Thanks again!

Very Nice. Keep at your work, you'll make it long and far in this kind of hobby.

Looking forward to more.!

-DD

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! Thanks so much for the great comment! I'm planning on taking writing up as a major in college cuz it's wut I love to do. Thanks again!

GOSH...this made me speechless as beautiful as the verse given to u...

lovely attempt....geez, i am jealous of you....hope u don't mind

such an in-depth analysis...

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

No I don't mind at all! I'm glad you enjoyed this story! I wrote it in like a half hour so I didn't think it was very good. But, I had alot of fun with it1 Thanks for commenting!

hi! kitkat. this is marvellous. u've made a meaningful rhyming poem out of a sentence. this requires some mastery. this love is strong enough to survive. liked it immensely. lol. ;-)

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it and read it even! Yeah it took a while to do since the sentence was soooooooo long but it was worth it! Thanks for reading! :D

OMG! Baby this is AWSOME!!! Great job!
Luv ya always,
ya big sissie

Posted: Nov 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks u r soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo nice to have read me poem. Gracias a billion hommie g to the hizzle my nizzle drizzle homes. Keep up the heat mother fer to the homes of all the dogs in the world! Love ya home skids!! :p



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