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Mistakes Made

Poem By: Queen of Angels
Poetry


Tags: love

i wrote this when i realized i fell in love with some one but it was too late View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 26, 2008    Reads: 97    Comments: 7    Likes: 0   


He gave me his heart and soul,

I gave him only my friendship.

He wanted me to be his number one,

I wanted him only when i got into a bind,

Mistake Made.

He wanted to hold hands,

I wanted to be just friends.

He wanted to call me Babygirl,

I only called him Mike,

Mistake Made.

He cared for me and my son,

I only cared he helped me when i needed it.

He took care of my son,

I let him with no intention of careing for him,

Mistake Made.

He fell in love,

I fell apart.

He asked me out,

I pushed himaway,

Mistake Made.

He realized i didn't want him,

I realized i actually loved.

He left never to return to see me again,

I realized i wanted to be his Babygirl,

Mistakes Made.


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Comments:

i think we share common use of poetry. (i also have never shared it before i found this sight). Writing is my release also so if you get a chance plz pop by and read some of mine.

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the comment
queen of angels

wow that is beautiful continue writing you have a talent for poetry

comment back on my poems
that would be most appreciated
thanks
=]

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the coment
queen of angels

Always when its too late

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

it is always when its too late that you realize something
queen of angels

I liked it, being honest. It wasn't the best of poems but you get your point across.
I felt one major weakness on it though: the stanza where you write about your son. Two verses in there didn't click nicely.

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the honesty
queen of angels

Life is funny, isn't it? I guess it proves a point that some times we are so blind to see that what we are looking for is what we have until. nice piece, I love it
it left me thinking a lot.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

yes we are blind and i was too blind to see what was in front of me thank you for the comment
queen of angels

we all make mistakes gorgeous , we are human . we can only hope that given another chance , we won't repeat them . i loved the poem and i'm hoping your hero will decide to give it one last try .
terry

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

well my hero is too far away and i have yet to contact him but thank you
queen of angels

i think your pen might be inseprable from your fingerskin. cuz you were born to write.

Posted: Dec 11, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much i have been through the good and the bad and back to hell and back again i write to exspress my self
queen of angels



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